
I awaken and start the day anew
I wish to shout for joy, but it won’t be
this piece of hell that’s become me and you
It’s simply washed all joy away from me
I wish to shout for joy, but it won’t be
With caution is how I now must behave
It’s simply washed all joy away from me
The gallant now replaced with the depraved
With caution is how I now must behave
I’m just as much his virgin as his vamp
The gallant now replaced with the depraved
A dexterous mixture of coy and tramp
I’m just as much his virgin as his vamp
Some elder ring of hell has been released
A dexterous mixture of coy and tramp
My “once upon a time’ prince now deceased
Some elder ring of hell has been released
To wallow in these sins he does impel
My “once upon a time’ prince now deceased
Like fairy tales my mother used to tell
To wallow in these sins he does impel
I join in things I once never conceived
Like fairy tales my mother used to tell
I‘m awed by all I’ve been lead to believe
I join in things I once never conceived
My mind and soul warped so far out of joint
I ‘m awed by all I’ve been lead to believe
Until I’m pushed beyond the breaking point
My mind and soul warped so far out of joint
I hushed the urge of fighting brevity
Until I’m pushed beyond the breaking point
I fought for my peace and longevity
I pushed the urge of wanting brevity
This piece of hell that’s become me and you
I fought for my peace and longevity
I awaken and start the day anew
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Thursday Poetry Forms – Week 24: Pantoum
bajanpoet
January 26, 2012 at 1:44 PM
WOW. Excellently done.
Raivenne
January 26, 2012 at 3:27 PM
Thank you, Bajan.
Kellie Elmore
January 26, 2012 at 3:17 PM
love this, reminds me of a Villanelle … what is the form? It is beautiful!
my latest
http://magicinthebackyard.wordpress.com/2012/01/25/gladys-cherry-survivor/
Raivenne
January 26, 2012 at 3:46 PM
This form is called a Pantoum. I have a link to how it is done following the poem. You’re right it is very much like a Villanelle in style..
charlesmashburn
January 26, 2012 at 4:58 PM
Wow! Great job on the very interesting form! Awesome storytelling, too!
Raivenne
January 26, 2012 at 8:17 PM
Thanks Charles! The Pantoum is not among my favorites, but I do like the results.
Taylor
January 29, 2012 at 2:44 PM
enthusiastic energy in your words,
well penned entry.
Happy Rally.
meiro
January 30, 2012 at 9:41 PM
Its a very good pantoum.
In my country we called Pantun, and yours here is cross pantoum.
Love it.