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Awaken

26 Jan


I awaken and start the day anew
I wish to shout for joy, but it won’t be
this piece of hell that’s become me and you
It’s simply washed all joy away from me

I wish to shout for joy, but it won’t be
With caution is how I now must behave
It’s simply washed all joy away from me
The gallant now replaced with the depraved

With caution is how I now must behave
I’m just as much his virgin as his vamp
The gallant now replaced with the depraved
A dexterous mixture of coy and tramp

I’m just as much his virgin as his vamp
Some elder ring of hell has been released
A dexterous mixture of coy and tramp
My “once upon a time’ prince now deceased

Some elder ring of hell has been released
To wallow in these sins he does impel
My “once upon a time’ prince now deceased
Like fairy tales my mother used to tell

To wallow in these sins he does impel
I join in things I once never conceived
Like fairy tales my mother used to tell
I‘m awed by all I’ve been lead to believe

I join in things I once never conceived
My mind and soul warped so far out of joint
I ‘m awed by all I’ve been lead to believe
Until I’m pushed beyond the breaking point

My mind and soul warped so far out of joint
I hushed the urge of fighting brevity
Until I’m pushed beyond the breaking point
I fought for my peace and longevity

I pushed the urge of wanting brevity
This piece of hell that’s become me and you
I fought for my peace and longevity
I awaken and start the day anew

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Entered in:
Thursday Poetry Forms – Week 24: Pantoum

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8 Responses to Awaken

  1. bajanpoet

    January 26, 2012 at 1:44 PM

    WOW. Excellently done. :)

     
    • Raivenne

      January 26, 2012 at 3:27 PM

      Thank you, Bajan.

       
  2. Kellie Elmore

    January 26, 2012 at 3:17 PM

    love this, reminds me of a Villanelle … what is the form? It is beautiful!

    my latest
    http://magicinthebackyard.wordpress.com/2012/01/25/gladys-cherry-survivor/

     
    • Raivenne

      January 26, 2012 at 3:46 PM

      This form is called a Pantoum. I have a link to how it is done following the poem. You’re right it is very much like a Villanelle in style..

       
  3. charlesmashburn

    January 26, 2012 at 4:58 PM

    Wow! Great job on the very interesting form! Awesome storytelling, too!

     
    • Raivenne

      January 26, 2012 at 8:17 PM

      Thanks Charles! The Pantoum is not among my favorites, but I do like the results.

       
  4. Taylor

    January 29, 2012 at 2:44 PM

    enthusiastic energy in your words,

    well penned entry.

    Happy Rally.

     
  5. meiro

    January 30, 2012 at 9:41 PM

    Its a very good pantoum.
    In my country we called Pantun, and yours here is cross pantoum.
    Love it.

     

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